Just a quick lil draft because i want to make this right. I also used the advice i got here to help me make it so thank you all!

  • woodenghost [comrade/them]@hexbear.netEnglish
    3·
    2 days ago

    I love it, but I don’t know much about organizing, so I can only offer small corrections. I know it’s just a draft, but if you’d still like them:

    suggestions

    • At the end of the second section, it should be:“Where one goes, we all go”

    • At the beginning of the next page, it should be:" … we must be aware of who the real enemy is" and also the sentence is long and would benefit from being split up.

    • The section “What is my role” doesn’t answer that question at all. I mean in the practical sense of what a union membership could actually entail: paying dues, voting if a strike should be called, striking, picketing, discussing working conditions with co-workers, helping with organizing, setting up meetings, connecting with other unions, etc. You could say that there are multiple roles in a union waiting to be filled. And that people can choose theirs based on their strengths.

    • "With the help of multiple organizations that have supported us in helping us achieve this endeavor…” should be shortened. For example: "With the help of multiple organizations that have supported us in this endeavor…” and even then the sentence that follows should still be shortened or split up.

    • KuroXppi [they/them]@hexbear.netEnglish
      3·
      2 days ago

      Where one goes, we all go"

      This is a rephrased Qanon saying (WWG1WGA. I would avoid it entirely. The unionist phrase is ‘an injury to one is an injury to all’ (and probably what the Q crowd cribbed for their version)